继网络购物之后,团购热潮也开始兴起

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Dear editor,

I’m Li Hua, a student from No. 2 middle school. As for group purchase, I have a right to talk about it because I’m one of those who are wild about it.

Nowadays with the rapid development and increasing popularity of the information technology, the possibility of group purchase has become a reality, which is a fashion especially among the youngsters. It not only saves time but also saves money. It has made our life more convenient and comfortable. We can spend more time and energy on other important things.

But sometimes what we buy doesn’t fit us, so we have to contact the manufacturers and return the goods, which wastes lots of time. At the same time, we also take a risk of items’ damage in the process of delivery.

But in all, I prefer this kind of shopping.

Yours,

Li Hua

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试题分析：本篇书面表达属于书信类写作，根据提示信息和题目要求来展开。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态。写作书信时一定要注意文章结构和层次，提出建议时要具有说服力，对于一些常用的动词，要注意其其他形式以更为简练的表达自己的观点，要灵活运用各种短语和从句来丰富文章的内容。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如Nowadays with the rapid development and increasing popularity of the information technology, the possibility of group purchase has become a reality, which is a fashion especially among the youngsters是with引导的伴随状语从句和which引导的定语从句的结合。It has made our life more convenient and comfortable用it作形式主语。But sometimes what we buy doesn’t fit us, so we have to contact the manufacturers and return the goods, which wastes lots of time是what引导的宾语从句和which引导的非限定性定语从句。此外，文章还使用了大量短语 become a reality , take a risk of, get rid of , fit us等。插入语As for ，At the same time，But in all和not only ......but also 、 I prefer this kind of shopping句型的使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。