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[评分标准]概括准确,语言规范,内容合适,语篇连贯

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[评分标准]概括准确,语言规范,内容合适,语篇连贯

【题目】Chocolate has come a long way through history, and one of the reasons is the Ferrero family, the creators of the world-famous Ferrero Rocher chocolate treats.The history of this family business starts back in the 1940s, when Pietro Ferrero and his wife, Piera, transformed a pastry shop into a factory.There, Pietro and his son, Michele, let their creativity lead them to form the building blocks of the company.Eventually, Michele took over the operation and set his sights on making the best products possible.

Michele’s efforts paid off.He turned his father’s creations into globally sold and consumed products.One of their most successful products, Nutella, had become a staple food in many homes.The third generation now runs the company.Michele’s sons, Pietro and Giovanni worked side by side as managing directors for ten years until an accident resulting in Pietro’ death.Still inspired by his family and their hard work and determination, Giovanni is guiding Ferrero into the future.

While staying true to the Ferrero motto of “work, create, and donate”, he is making sure his family’s business is an example of success in the past, present, and future.

[写作内容]

1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。

2.以约120个词谈谈Ferrero及其家人成功制作巧克力对你的启迪,内容包括:

(1)描述人们创业的艰辛。

(2)分析人们创业成功的原因。

(3)Ferrero及其家人成功制作巧克力对你的启迪。

[写作要求]

1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事,也可以参照阅读材料的内容,但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

[评分标准]

概括准确,语言规范,内容合适,语篇连贯。

 

【答案】

With three generations efforts of the Ferrero family, Ferrero, a chocolate company, has developed into a world-famous business from the then pastry shop through their creativity, hard work and determination.

Its no easy job to start a business.You may not only suffer from hardships but also run across unexpected risks.You need to deal with all kinds of people and learn many new things through your work, especially when you are green hands in a new field.

What account for ones success in his work include determination and hard work.It also requires of him qualities like honesty, patience and bravery.

As for us students, we all have a dream of our future.After setting a goal of our life, we must devote ourselves to achieving it.No matter what difficulty we meet, just try our best to overcome it.Only in this way can we live our dreams.

【解析】

试题分析:本题要根据英文提示信息写出一篇作文,这对于学生来说比较有难度,首先要理解短文的意思,然后根据短文的内容写出作文,需要写出:(1)描述人们创业的艰辛。(2)分析人们创业成功的原因。(3)Ferrero及其家人成功制作巧克力对你的启迪。 写作时注意:1、仔细阅读有关提示,弄清试题提供的所有信息,明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架,要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语,按照一定逻辑关系来写。本文写作时可以按照方位顺序进行介绍。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般现在时态。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑,层次分明,而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如Ferrero, a chocolate company, has developed into a world-famous business from the then pastry shop through their creativity用了现在完成时,Only in this way can we live our dreams是一个倒装句, With three generations efforts of the Ferrero family用了with的复合结构,是一篇不错的提纲类作文

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