要点：大家好，我的名字叫Millie， 今天将带领大家参观我的家乡

【答案】

My hometown

Hello, everyone! My name is Millie. Today I will show you around my hometown.

My hometown is not big but very quiet. It is at the foot of the South Hill. It is 15 miles from Star Town. The air is fresh here with green hills and trees around. You can smell the flowers and hear birds singing when you get up in the morning. There is a beautiful lake near my hometown. We often row on it.

There are 100 families. Some people raise cows and some people grow wheat. They all know each other and are willing to help others. They live happily here. Welcome to visit my hometown.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇短文要求我们以Millie的身份，介绍一下自己的家乡。题目中给我们列出了具体的写作提纲，我们可以按照这些内容，用正确的英语翻译出来。通过分析可知，这篇短文我们应主要使用一般现在时，人称可以根据具体表达的需要来选择。写作时，尽量使用一些短语和句型，如在山脚下at the foot of，起床get up， there be 句型等。还可以使用一些连词如and, but等，使短文意思连贯，表达流畅。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的范文，短文中作者按照题目的要求，介绍了自己的家乡。这篇短文主要有以下几个优点：一是内容完整，层次清晰。短文分成三段，第一段引出了话题；第二段介绍了家乡的环境；最后介绍了家乡的人们。第二，短文使用了正确的人称和时态，以第三人称为主，还用到了第二人称you；第三，短文中使用了一些较好的句式和句型，增强了文章的表现力，如My hometown is not big but very quiet.、ou can smell the flowers and hear birds singing when you get up in the morning、here is a beautiful lake near my hometown、They all know each other and are willing to help others等。