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写作提分要点：如何让作文更有表现力
发布时间：2018-10-09 杭州朗阁
一
避免使用语意弱的“be”动词把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语
这个技巧并不是那么容易掌握，但是确实是一个能够提高雅思写作成绩非常实用的技巧。
例如：
Weak：The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
Revision：The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
Or：The landscape， bare and brown， begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词
例如：
1) Weak：The team members are good players.
Revision：The team members play well.
2) Weak：One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.
Revision：One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语
例如：
1) Weak：There is no opportunity for promotion.
Revision：No opportunity for promotion exists.
2) Weak：Here are the books you ordered.
Revision：The books you ordered have arrived.
二
多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了
这样的具体描写可以让文章看起来更具说服力，当然也就可以提高雅思写作成绩了。
例如：
1）Poor：My supervisor went past my desk.
Better：My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
2）Poor：She is a careful shopper.
Better：She compares prices and quality.
三
尽量运用主动语态
之所以要这样做，是因为很多人不明白什么时候该用主动，什么时候该用被动。用错了，当然也就谈不上提高雅思写作成绩了。
例如：
1）Weak：The organization has been supported by charity.
Better：Charity has supported the organization.
2）Weak：The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
Better：Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
四
防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语
想要提高雅思写作成绩就得使写作的用词简单、生动。
例如：
1）Wordy：My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
Improved：My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
2）Wordy：We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
Improved：We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
3）Redundant：We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
Improved：We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
4）Redundant：My sister and I bought the same， identical dress in different stores.
Improved：My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
五
杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语
这是语言考试，不是专业考试，提高雅思写作成绩的关键点在语言上，在文章的表现力上！
例如：
1）Weak：They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
Improved：They will not agree to any of his proposals.
2）Weak：I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
Improved：I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
